JayCinderLeaf: Argument Pg 4

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Finally! I finished the page!

First off, I changed the designs. I decided to not add stripes to Cinderpaw. So now she looks like a Cinderpaw to me. X3 And on Jaypaw, I made the stripes lighter. I’m not sure if I’m gonna keep him like this, but I wanted to know if you guys like this Jaypaw design, or the one I drew on page 1. X3 Also, I have finally drawn Leafpool! 8D I added an extra white thing to the white part of her face (the white part that goes upwards). I wanted to know if that looked good, or if I should just remove that part. ;3

The hardest panel here was panel 4. And it wasn’t because of the drawing. It was the planning. =___= The way they worded that part in the book confused me. It said “Jawpaw began unsteadily. He paused, feeling Cinderpaw’s whiskers brush his paws.” And then that’s when she spoke. So I thought she put her head on her paws or something, and since he’s standing near her, her whiskers brushed his paws. But then when I drew it, it made no sense. =___= If she was prompting him to go on, then why would she put her head on her paws? I would picture her leaning closer or something. To me, if she puts her head on her paws, she’s either sad or she’s excited. But…I don’t know. I’m confused. So I just drew this.

Sorry for the messy coloring and the sucky background. XD

Jaypaw, Cinderpaw, and Leafpool, along with Warriors, belong to Erin Hunter.
Comic belongs to me!